The third paragraph starts with "We" instead of "us" since there isn't any repetition of "we", which makes it harder to understand.
The fourth and fifth paragraphs start with "We" instead of "We've" or "Our".
The sixth paragraph uses "Let us" instead of "let's". It could be "We will" as well.
The seventh paragraph introduces "the best" instead of "a good".
The eighth and ninth paragraphs use commas incorrectly: "And" should be replaced by "and" after "showing".
The tenth and eleventh paragraphs use "our" instead of "ourselves".
The last paragraph changes "showed" to "will show" which makes it clearer.
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