你我我们 "this magnificent monster has defeated me time and time again." (It has defeated me repeatedly.)
Its ferocity has been a constant source of my pain and sorrow. "Its ferocity" should be "its fierce attack."
It is like a shadowy figure on the horizon that looms over me, with every passing day, it grows closer and closer. "It is like a shadowy figure" could be rephrased as "It has become a looming presence over me."
Many times I thought I had overcome it, but deep down, there was always a lurking fear of failure, of falling back into my old habits once again. "Many times" should be "many times," and "falling back into my old habits once again" should be "falling back into my old patterns of behavior."
希望这可以帮到你!
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